This week we’ll analyze Yelawolf’s quatrain, extracted from a song called “One Train”. It’s an advanced combination of transitions, clever breath breaks, single and compound rhymes.

*The Rhyme Scheme starts at the 2:52 mark.

The Lyrics

.                                                          You in
school at 10, late, Radioactive’s goin’ gold
And so, GREAT, Do I give a flying duck If
I’m applyin’ love, to my rhymin’ plus alignin’ us,
Alabama’s climbin’ up, wait no I don’t give a
Flying duck,

Rhyme Scheme

–,1–2
-2,1,-3*-
3*-3*3*,
-3*,122–
3*,——

1-late/great/wait
2-gold/so/no/don’t
3-flying duck(x2)/applying love/rhymin plus/alignin us/climbin up

Explanation

Let me start with the principle which should be leaving the strongest impression on you-the transition between rhyme schemes. Listen closely to the rhyme scheme prior to the one which is being analyzed. Can you hear how he transitioned?

All you do is put the last rhyme of your pattern on the first bar of your second pattern and then start with another rhyme. If it has to be illustrated, it would be:

–a–a
—a–
–a—
-a,—-
a,–b–
-b,—

Since we have this out of the way, let’s look at the individual bars.

The first bar is simple. You introduce two rhyme types(late/gold).

On the second bar, you rhyme those two types(so/great) and then introduce a compound rhyme from a separate type(flying duck).
The interesting thing is the order. On the first bar, it’s 1-2 and on the second bar it’s 2-1. So pay attention to that.

On bar three, you’re populating it with three compounds(applying love/rhymin plus/alignin us) and let the compound pattern spill in to the 4th bar(Climbing up).

After that, you bring back the three single rhymes from the first and second bar (wait/no/don’t). Then you want to finish your rhyme scheme on first beat from bar 5, so you can transition to the next scheme without anyone realizing.

Pay attention to the breath breaks as well. They are indicated by the “,” sign.

Can you do it too? That’s very advanced and you need guts to even attempt it, but I’ll be quite impressed if someone takes a crack at it!

Feel free to submit your attempts in the comments section below.

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  • Sz
    Reply

    –,1–2
    -2,1,-3*-
    3*-3*3*,
    -3*,122–
    3*,——

    1- copy / puppy/ rock it
    2- flee / be / street/ still
    3-jumping high(x2)/bumbin mine /
    Stopping rhymes /draws on time / laws in crime

    Eyo listen
    try to be real no, copy , thats who I bee
    On the street, rock it, im jumping high to
    Stopping rhymes the laws in crime draws on time,
    Im just bumbin mine, puppy be still cuz the g is
    Jumping high

  • mac10
    Reply

    Imma mac sub machine gun, i gotta head full of thoughts i aint got blanks. My rhyme placemunt.
    Is correct, make more sense, im not bolted im my mind the door slip. My eyes clitch, when i get tired.
    Call the supervisor which, i aint know nothin.

    Its pretty bad right.

  • Loso
    Reply

    I’m feeling like king, that’s only missing a throne
    And chrome things, on the side of my hip bone
    My tip tho, don’t flip homes,_ I flips homes
    When my clip blows, things chrome, now your
    Wishing you fallow my tip tho

    • RappingManual
      Reply

      Okay, the rhyme placement is correct. The syllable count can be corrected in some places. Compare both quatrains bar by bar and see where you should’ve shortened the bar.

  • kaosy lick
    Reply

    moonwalking on blessed seas hoping to see another moon
    so I would knee, reciting words veiled in my palms
    or probably read the psalms to relive ma tongue off sins I sang
    my reflection filled with dusk, peace to the youths keep your genes intact

    –,1–2
    -2,1,-3*-
    3*-3*3*,
    -3*,122–
    3*,——

    1- seas, knee, peace
    2- moon, would, to, youth
    3- in my palms, read the psalms, relieve my tounge,sins I sang,filled with dusk, genes intact

  • k.ray
    Reply

    they all said i sucked, LIES, cannibalism eatin dreams
    new schemes, WISE, not to be the equal rap
    all deceitful crap a evil gap only weasel frap just feeble slack,
    NEWMANJARON a new lethal zap, rise screams and beams for drugs shows
    this is all nothing but deceitful crap,
    1-Lies/wise/rise
    2-dreams/schemes/screams/beams
    3-equal rap/deceitful crap(X2)/evil gap/weasel frap/feeble slack/lethal zap
    since this sounds like a bunch of gibberish imma explain it….
    FRAP-take up slack. weasels cause slack and i try to pick up with my lethal zap-kill or as of…
    NEWMANJARON 4 LYFE!!

    • Free-D
      Reply

      Bro, what is newmanjaron? A group or yewr clique or something? ._.

      • k.ray
        Reply

        Yeah NEWMANJARON is like my group, its made up of me and my homeboy E_new 22 (he just doesn’t get on site)…. I want to make it something like Kendrick Lamar’s Hiiipower movement, something that promotes good morals and higher learning
        Thats why its NEWMANJARON 4 LYFE!!

        • Free-D
          Reply

          Sounds real interesting bro. I wish I could learn more about it. Yew guys got any records or songs?

          • k.ray

            not yet… we dont know how to get into a studio but imma start doin some stuff its gonna have poor quality….. but when i get into a studio imma make a song specifically for you to explain it out… Im super happy that u like it and find it interesting makes me wanna make it a house hold name!!! THANKS
            NEWMANJARON 4 LYFE!!

    • RappingManual
      Reply

      Everything is perfect up to rhyme 3. There you have more than 3 compounds man. You have 4.

      4th bar has the correct rhyme placement, but the 5th bar has too many words before the rhyme man. In the original scheme, you can see that the 5th bar starts with the rhyme and there is nothing before it.

      Other than that, spectacular! Horribly hard scheme, you did fine! It’s nice to see that you’re ready to spend your time attempting this! It shows alot about your dedication to get better!

      • k.ray
        Reply

        i hate all of her actions,LOW, shes depressing always down
        she’ll drown,SLOW, i know im not savin her im
        a blammin blur ,only cravin stir she pavin slur,
        unhappiness raven fur, so bound she frown i aint
        savin her
        NEWMANJARON 4 LYFE!!

  • The Inventor
    Reply

    You at

    home at 5, lame, heart growing cold

    Yeah so, GREAT, Do I give a flying fuck If

    I’m supplying buzz, and providing love applying fun

    Career climbing up, wait no I don’t give a

    Flying fuck,

    1-lame/great/wait

    2-cold/so/no/don’t

    3-flying fuck(x2)/supplying buzz/providing love/applying fun/climbing up

  • Free-D
    Reply

    –,1–2
    -2,1,-3*-
    3*-3*3*,
    -3*,122–
    3*,——

    The Bars –

    “Mind is locked, Fuck, This examinations I’m so screwed.
    Eh Dude? What?! I guess I ain’t passin this, I
    was rapping shit, and was blastin sick hats and kicks.
    Didn’t learn or last with this nut but who did knew we ain’t
    passin this.”

    1 – Fuck/What/Nut
    2 – Screwed /Dude/ Who/ Knew
    3 – Passin’ this/ Rapping shit/ Blastin’ sick/ hats and kicks/ last with this/ *Passin’ this.

    Explanation –

    This is basically a stupid regret and realization of a student who loves hip hop.
    The first lines is a situation in the examination hall
    Second line is a little conversation and the rest is a follow up…. And hats and kicks are a double entendre,
    They could be fashion as a teen dies for, hats are ’em gears which we wear over our head and kicks are shoes but at the same time
    Hats and kicks are part of drum kits, this could be a subliminal way of describing hip hop beats (instrumentals). Didn’t learn and last with this nut is basically blatant statement… and the last line just shows that the rapper never expected he’d fail the test 😛

    Hope this is impressive :/

    • RappingManual
      Reply

      Yeah man, it truly is! I can even see that you’ve included another internal on the 4th bar. So you have 1122 with the “nut/but”. Maybe it was unconscious-the sweetest type of rhyme!

      The rhyme placement is perfect, the syllable count is almost identical!

      Excellent!

  • Nomad
    Reply

    I’m going to have two cracks at it:

    First I walked in
    Then talked so quiet
    No riot this shows private closed eyelids
    So I pilot brought him a coffin
    Don’t pry it.

    1-walked/talked/brought
    2-in/then/him/coffin
    3-so quiet/no riot/shows private/closes eyelids/don’t pry it

    ———————————————————–

    On days like these
    We say the lines are blurred
    Because I’ve heard what’s like murmurs of lies slurred
    Behind pillars of clay weaked to debris
    As life emerges.

    1-days/say/clay
    2-these/we/weaked/debris
    3-I’ve heard/like murmurs/lies slurred/behind pillars/life emerges

    This one is more poetic of the feeling you get when a lie from someone you love is revealed. The lines are blurred because you like the feeling of the lie better but the truth is true. It’s reality. And you’re not sure which one you’d rather have.
    And the rest describes the lie. When real life emerges lies crumble to the ground.

    Hope it’s correct. I know the sylabbals isn’t 100% but i think the rhyme scheme is correct.

    • RappingManual
      Reply

      –,1–2
      -2,1,-3*-
      3*-3*3*,
      -3*,122–
      3*,——

      Your rhyme placement is correct on both. The syllables count is really different and the breath breaks are not there.

      Even though the rhyme schemes sounds much different than the original, you’re still following the rhyme placing principle and that’s the main thing.

      You’re an artist, you can change it as you find pleasing!

      Nice work!

  • Curtis Mayfield
    Reply

    they tell me, off the edge ive dived, never scared of a gat
    cuz this cat, got nine lives, and even more curiosity
    for probably, I’m more comprably, the core philosophy
    for socrates, hope ill end alive(,?) I tat that on my back
    or possibly,

    –,1–2
    -2,1,-3*-
    3*-3*3*,
    -3*,122–
    3*,——

    1- dived/lives/alive
    2-gat/cat/tat/that/back
    3-more curiosity/for probably/more comprably (phonetic spelling)/core philosophy/for socrates/or possibly

    Explanation
    -Play on the phrases curiosity killed the cat and that cats have nine lives
    -Socrates was put to death for spreading the philosophy of curiosity and challenging authority

    I dont really know what exactly I did on the 122 lol. I wasnt quite sure where to take the breath break to make it flow properly.

    • RappingManual
      Reply

      –,1–2
      -2,1,-3*-
      3*-3*3*,
      -3*,122–
      3*,——

      Let’s see how you’ve done it then. You guys keep on surprising me..It’s all correct as well! I’m seeing that “?” on the 4th bar and don’t really know why is it there. The breath break has to be right after the compound, so in your case, right after “for socrates”. There’s no need for anything after that.

      You’ve added more syllables on the second bar. You can see that the original has the rhyme word, right after the other. So it’s “and so, great”. You have two syllables before your rhyme word, but that’s minor details though.

      Great work! I’m very impressed! Following an actual content line makes it even better!

  • Shre
    Shre
    Reply

    It was so low & lame , before my wind blew in
    ‘fore I put my Shoe In , the frame , than it got Isolated ,
    after My Flow Skated, A Guy so heated , But Dry Dough Plated ,
    Still High So Rated , proclaim ’em as Brewing as they ruin the game ,
    I grow Inflated .
    ___
    Explaination:-
    Lame/Blew in,
    Shoe in / frame ….Isolated
    My flow skated / Guy So heated , Dry Dough Plated .
    High SO Rated / Proclaim / Brewing / Ruin
    Grow Inflated

    _____
    Metaphors:-
    Dry Dough PLated( All the Dough served on my plate is Dry,as Dry Dough is not good for eating :p .e the things offered to me arent satisfying my needs ).

    High So RatedStraight meaning , ie I am rated High )
    Proclaim ’em Brewing ( Announcing Officially that they are sent for Brewing [The production of malt beverages] as they arent good at rapping ) ,

    I grow Inflated :- Im grown and INflated now :p

    • RappingManual
      Reply

      –,1–2
      -2,1,-3*-
      3*-3*3*,
      -3*,122–
      3*,——

      Okay, let’s see

      Woooow, you did it perfectly man!! Haha, that’s crazy! I didn’t think that there would be someone attempting this, not to mention getting it right the first time! I’m impressed!

      The rhyme placement is correct on each bar. Re-created to perfection. You even managed to keep a subject matter that makes sense, so congratulations for that as well. Metaphors in it as well, appreciate the explanations below!

      Great stuff man, great stuff! Shre!

      • Shre
        Shre
        Reply

        Thanks A Lot Sir . Now I am waiting for the a contest 😀

        • RappingManual
          Reply

          It’s on Friday man! Get your rhymes polished, because the competition is getting fiercer with every next round!

          • The Inventor

            i’m winning next round, I promise you.

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