Hey everyone, in the comment section of this post you can post something that you have recorded, it doesn’t have to be a studio quality track, it can be something recorded on your cell phone, just make sure that the beat can be heard (no acapellas, only recordings with a beat to it) and you will also need to post the lyrics of your verse(s).

I will mostly focus the feedback on the way you sound and while this will be somewhat limited (due to the lyrics/flow courses on the main page offering full instructor to student teaching) it will still give you some important directions and assessments.

Looking forward to your entries.

DemoKingz

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  • Kid Kazarie
    Kid Kazarie
    Reply

    https://soundcloud.com/kidkazarie/sunchaser
    My first song ever man. I know we not a community like it used to be but, I’d appreciate any feedback yall got on this site. If your on rappad prop my song on there at this link https://www.rappad.co/rap/362738
    Yeah, but big shoutout to Rapping manual and this community. It really got the ball rolling for me when it comes to rap.

    Kid Kazarie is my name
    I guess I’m kind of a sunchaser
    Trailblazer, some say wit bad behavior
    My crew was all hell raisers
    Lasers all set to stun
    Shocked that I’m the one in the zone
    let your mind roam
    I’ve grown and passed the lone fact
    That the only thing keeping back
    Was my fear, not math, not cash
    not even my past, the last man up
    Is the first man to lend a hand
    Cause he understand the feeling fam
    Used to draw lines in the sand
    Now, it lines where we performin
    uhh, these race bout endurance
    Do you see the importance,
    I wanna be glourious
    Nah…Victorious
    Star crusher, Sun chaser
    Universal pen savior
    Head in the clouds,moon gazer
    With Asteroid impact, I make a crater(2x)
    I’m a sun chaser
    Up from here, in the atmosphere
    I float, I float
    Saint or sinner man can’t taint
    My view is safe, in dark space
    The haste seizes,
    The mind is breathing
    Air my lungs don’t need it
    I am clearest when in stasis
    I can hear Orion’s playlist
    Watched the matrix with Carl Sagan
    Comet’s like millions of matches
    Secret passages hid in Red shift
    No ship when I wrote these lines
    Admire the lights in the sky
    One of em is mine
    Yeah, that’s my shine,yep
    Aura,one of a kind,bet
    A true star in disguise
    Man on moon, man in space
    Or front row to planets playin chase
    It was all put in place
    Must seek his face
    Hand makes the galaxy swirl
    Universe just a pearl
    To clam in seaworth of immensity
    All existents has viscosity
    Check the selfish chemistry
    Forget it,it makes sense to me
    The dissertion to lengthy
    Will heaven sit with me?
    Or is this belief extinction bound
    Bound
    Bound
    Starlight,Burn bright
    Clear as day in eternal night
    Galaxy cluster my life
    Starstuff made just right(2x)
    I’m a soulchaser
    Up here,Heaven’s will
    I float,I float(2x)
    Killah rap,killah rap that all I’m doing
    killah rap, ask for redemption
    They all got filler rap
    Tired of hearing that
    Got a star map with a key to Mars
    Rest in God arms,carry me home
    The lone man with such favor
    A nigga who can taste quark flavors
    No vader, when I light up with the lightsaber
    Hit the mark after a few prayers
    A man can now only labor
    But, Amen I can only believe in later
    A true sunchaser,
    Always comes back to dreams
    Imagination burst at the seams
    They still asking why my eyes got that gleam
    I’m a sun chaser
    Up from here, in the atmosphere
    I float, I float

  • Mr. Williams
    Reply

    Sorry Still the wrong link

    https://soundcloud.com/mrwilliamsq16/ash-on-the-windowsill-prod-toucon

    looking outside all i see is the windowpane
    Emotions skys different shades all day
    i gotta blow big clouds to get rain on the whole parade
    I’ve heard the lecture before this shits being overplayed
    I feel like I’m learning bout space with all this N.O.V.A. cane
    Nothing been the same since i came back to the village
    Everybody been sipping more people hitting them cigarettes
    It’s ok ash on my windowsill
    Wind blows in but no cash flows in Im african
    I put the still in still-life
    freeze frame but that still real life
    Freeze frame paint me in a bad light
    50 shades of grey but I’m black
    land of milk and honey but the river half and half
    Head down following cattle tracks
    till they morph to Cadillacs rags to rich
    Average kid what are you my life analyst
    Is this a bar cause you keeping tabs on it
    Wait for the candle to melt then the dabs will kick
    cackling savage witch smoke flows to the rafters and shit
    where the sour patch kid sit psychopathic and shit
    blocking my path thats an eclipse
    Wondering how i got this but i been in the streets asking for it
    Put gas in the whip so a black man will pick more cotton
    Get active in it fuck robbie rotten plotting to offer oxycontin
    bulldoze the whole forest I’m the blue oxen
    Cant catch me I’m so clean my lawyers is johnson and johnson
    You always watching so i might as well drop a boxset
    Walking on nails so it’s lucky my socks red
    beating round the bush till it burning speaking type prophet
    same old schemes me seeking some profit
    Im mr. meseeks me needing to drop dead
    One day this will rebound on me but I’m boxed in
    clock ticks tsk tsk taps wrist often
    why you looking at me i don’t know where your watch is
    Strongman all i do is shoplift Im too hot gotta take caution
    curtains

  • Mr. Williams
    Reply

    Sorry I changed the link. Feedback still appreciated

    https://soundcloud.com/user-703186160/ash-on-the-windowsill-prod-toucon

    looking outside all i see is the windowpane
    Emotions skys different shades all day
    i gotta blow big clouds to get rain on the whole parade
    I’ve heard the lecture before this shits being overplayed
    I feel like I’m learning bout space with all this N.O.V.A. cane
    Nothing been the same since i came back to the village
    Everybody been sipping more people hitting them cigarettes
    It’s ok ash on my windowsill
    Wind blows in but no cash flows in Im african
    I put the still in still-life
    freeze frame but that still real life
    Freeze frame paint me in a bad light
    50 shades of grey but I’m black
    land of milk and honey but the river half and half
    Head down following cattle tracks
    till they morph to Cadillacs rags to rich
    Average kid what are you my life analyst
    Is this a bar cause you keeping tabs on it
    Wait for the candle to melt then the dabs will kick
    cackling savage witch smoke flows to the rafters and shit
    where the sour patch kid sit psychopathic and shit
    blocking my path thats an eclipse
    Wondering how i got this but i been in the streets asking for it
    Put gas in the whip so a black man will pick more cotton
    Get active in it fuck robbie rotten plotting to offer oxycontin
    bulldoze the whole forest I’m the blue oxen
    Cant catch me I’m so clean my lawyers is johnson and johnson
    You always watching so i might as well drop a boxset
    Walking on nails so it’s lucky my socks red
    beating round the bush till it burning speaking type prophet
    same old schemes me seeking some profit
    Im mr. meseeks me needing to drop dead
    One day this will rebound on me but I’m boxed in
    clock ticks tsk tsk taps wrist often
    why you looking at me i don’t know where your watch is
    Strongman all i do is shoplift Im too hot gotta take caution
    curtains

  • Mr. Williams
    Reply

    This is my first track any feedback would dope thanks

    https://soundcloud.com/user-703186160/ash-on-the-windowsill-prod-toucon

    looking outside all i see is the windowpane
    Emotions skys different shades all day
    i gotta blow big clouds to get rain on the whole parade
    I’ve heard the lecture before this shits being overplayed
    I feel like I’m learning bout space with all this N.O.V.A. cane
    Nothing been the same since i came back to the village
    Everybody been sipping more people hitting them cigarettes
    It’s ok ash on my windowsill
    Wind blows in but no cash flows in Im african
    I put the still in still-life
    freeze frame but that still real life
    Freeze frame paint me in a bad light
    50 shades of grey but I’m black
    land of milk and honey but the river half and half
    Head down following cattle tracks
    till they morph to Cadillacs rags to rich
    Average kid what are you my life analyst
    Is this a bar cause you keeping tabs on it
    Wait for the candle to melt then the dabs will kick
    cackling savage witch smoke flows to the rafters and shit
    where the sour patch kid sit psychopathic and shit
    blocking my path thats an eclipse
    Wondering how i got this but i been in the streets asking for it
    Put gas in the whip so a black man will pick more cotton
    Get active in it fuck robbie rotten plotting to offer oxycontin
    bulldoze the whole forest I’m the blue oxen
    Cant catch me I’m so clean my lawyers is johnson and johnson
    You always watching so i might as well drop a boxset
    Walking on nails so it’s lucky my socks red
    beating round the bush till it burning speaking type prophet
    same old schemes me seeking some profit
    Im mr. meseeks me needing to drop dead
    One day this will rebound on me but I’m boxed in
    clock ticks tsk tsk taps wrist often
    why you looking at me i don’t know where your watch is
    Strongman all i do is shoplift Im too hot gotta take caution
    curtains

  • Kai
    Reply
  • Chibu Ezid
    Chibu Ezid
    Reply

    This is a track off my debut mixtape “Orangutan Arms”. Any feedback I could get would be helpful in guiding me as an artist. Thanks for listening.

    https://soundcloud.com/chibuezid/zombies-outside-prod-1vart?in=chibuezid/sets/orangutan-arms

    Thrummy Gluttonous fellow
    Fat as santa belly is yellow
    Strung jesus from the logo of the chevy
    Thinking i should be like abe lincoln
    Truepenny
    The ruse heavy
    Carried by the confused many
    Titties big as doubles d’s vocabulary
    Buy fine wine from apu’s kwik
    Drinking harry’s broomstick
    Beat you with a bat babe ruthless
    Start screamin let me hear those acoustics
    Like ms curtis brought her guitar and the amps bass boosted
    Wish black kids voice could fill up a room quick
    Like that maroon clique
    Children seem dubious because they new to this
    Seen success now go with dora to explore ruins
    Force students to endorse movements when they sittin in school with nothing to do with it
    Stay studious so one day you can prove you’re rich
    Not how you use your time but how you watch your wrist
    Black filled cotton fist cost a bit to an economist
    Raise a kid to swap place with the opulence
    Opposition your position so raise your fist
    Wolverine slash prices with a razor fist
    Still made profit on the topic of outrageous shit
    Threw a business pitch like 50 cent
    Gambino hit because the internet
    They say ze zer like it’s a different sex
    That i haven’t tried wont get no nigga wet
    Bow for the caesar i’m a different bet

    • DemoKingz
      DemoKingz
      Reply

      Hey man, I like your voice and delivery, though it may be too influenced by Tyler the Creator, or maybe I’m wrong? haha. But anyway, I’d only suggest that you check out the scatting to a beat task from the flow course, which is open for free, and that can help you ride the beat in the best way, not that you’re doing a bad job, but it can be even better. And also, I’d suggest that you change your intonation more often because otherwise all the lines sound kinda the same.

  • Little Knowledge
    Reply

    Hey Wats good? I came across your site while searching for something thats important for me. Im lucky that I found it now. I wanna share my song so that I can grow myself. Any sorts of feedback is appreciated. Please check it and help me to achieve more. Also, if you stop my song in anywhere please let me know what makes my track boring to you. Much Appreciated and Respect.
    here is link for my song: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yPCOAI8KxkY

    Instrumental Used : Problem Solver – Vinnie Paz
    (Verse 1)
    A super vigilant right up in my territory 
    Planning to jeopardize, inconspicuous his theory 
    He stays behind a curtain like a puppet specialist 
    A pacifist who got interest to please his selfishness
     story back from  pages, traces vast message
    Address to web, sight of a classic 
    Wordup Bastard, if you ask me
    I stay away from them AIDS like magic 
    Box you in garbage bag like plastic
     fags acts so different Like nothing happened 
    A friend of me is a frenemy or enemy?
    An enemy is a friend of me to end of me
    Lemme give a definition of fake friend in a quick minute
    No gimmick straight image 
    A person who stays with you in happiness but runs for free ticket
     Praise you with all heavenly word if you feed him biscuits 
    take a look around, how they Rollin like limp bizkit 
    I repentance that moment when flip them couple of digit, my mistake 
    Now Scene is Crystal, where you gonna hide?
    Ain’t no Muthafucka alive with that bonafide
    Thinking of those hoes,knockin my closed doors
    Got Tricks in my all clothes, stop sticking as Nose coke 
    damn! These faggots, eats carrots , a gang of a Gold Digger 
    I cut them off like Phone Receiver, 
    need no support from these Phony people
    I’m more like Tony Stark with a skill of ninja 

    [chorus]
    Have you ever had a friend who is a foe? 
    Check that innocent attribute you ain’t sure 
    Appearance in a backstage, acts that lead role 
    These bastard are parasite who happy to eat soul

    [Verse 2]
    A friend in need is a friend in myth
    A fantasy as fake as phantoms deeds
     Stop putting that random shit 
    Cuz Friendship relationship is cancerous 
    Packs you by emotional speech like leader
    Never imagine a world filled with good people
    Or get a shot five times in back when you step outta gate
    By your own Believer, The next John Lennon 
    This ain’t no lesson shit
    I’m sweating cuz I been busy chasing me 
    He might say who the fuck this Asian is
    I ain’t even started but you can feel me at the Maximus 
    I Was never Surprised by them action since I was ready
    What was coming for me, I would certainly get it
    And I never let my guard down tho my knees were heavy
    I moved on slow and steady cuz what I planned in my lonely time, I won’t regret it 
    I thought they smokin jane, they trippin in jealousy
    They the type of person who spreads faster than fallacy 
    They actually thought I would never notice the move they made so carelessly 
    And embellish with fake smile, now they selling it
    See I got a hell with me, I was raised with no silver spoon 
    Stayed hungry early morning, pops didn’t arrived at afternoon 
    I wished devil may hear me like Taz, I would clashed for looney tunes 
    Lost my brother from another mother, my mood swing by gloomy news 
    And if black thoughts attack my dome, I struggle to find its Root,
    It’s comfort to stay in solitary and emancipate my ego
    Than splurge a happy time with fake people
    Cuz whatever I did was my responsibility 
    But They took it for granted, now I don’t feel no pity. 

    [chorus]
    Have you ever had a friend who is a foe? 
    Check that innocent attribute you ain’t sure 
    Appearance in a backstage, acts that lead role 
    These bastard are parasite who happy to eat soul

    • DemoKingz
      DemoKingz
      Reply

      Hey man I’m glad you found this site 🙂 As for your song, the flow was rather steady on its own but I felt it sounded rushed in relation to the beat, especially at places. I like your voice it has a nice sharpness and assurance to it but I’d also suggest that you play more with it and expand your range. That way you can change your intonation more often and come off as more interesting.

      Cool, so for the way to ride a beat better and be in full harmony with it check this – https://rappingmanual.com/rm-flow-course-task-1-scatting-to-a-beat/

      The task there asks that you do scatting over a Nas beat but what I’d ask you to do is to do the scatting over the beat you used for this song of yours, and then I’ll do a scatting of my own to it and that should be of a lot of help.

      As for changing intonation and stylizing your lines more check this – https://rappingmanual.com/rap-tutorials-rhyming-words-vs-rhyming-voice/

      • DemoKingz
        DemoKingz
        Reply

        Oh and no worries, you got great potential and a dope current level of skill, I didn’t mean to suggest otherwise, but I’m always on the lookout for how to make things even that much better 🙂

  • Schemes
    Reply

    I know im far away from bein at the top,
    I want some feedback on how i can grow much bigger much love to this site it has helped me enormously !
    Heres the link.
    http://picosong.com/xi9R/

    Heres the lyrics:

    Survivin ,blazing ,tryna keep my face in(4)
    Erasing, Feds complicating ,miss(4),
    under, placing(1)
    But now the g straight fading finding(4) betta places(1) (places)
    Raised in the gutta(2), raised by a single mother(4) praised by a under lover(2) chased by them(4) under covers(1),
    My taste for them mothafuckers(3), ways to get paid(4) now listen mothafucka(2),
    Devided by enemies by anymeans(4)
    I gotta get the green(2) , gotta chase my dream(4) im aproacing fucking real cocking back with my steel(4) , aaint(1) nothing safeee in the street (3),
    Gotta watch my back gotta keep a fucking strap(1) , u betta fucking tap(3) , betta
    understand(1), I aint playing with no punk crew (1) ,all I wanna do is hit the fame up switch the game up (4)cuz the game is now lamed up(2) fucking drained out (4), niggaz can’t even explain that though(4),but heres a qlue sign me up and think about the value we can do(1) aiit

    Real thuuugs multiply (multiply)

    Reaal thuugs fucking ride ( fucking ride)

    Reeal thuugs alwaays hiigh (always high)
    X2

    Now baby let me, come inside

    Come inside

    So fuck how u play feel my fucking rhyme spray(4),
    The g rhyme way floating inside you babe(4,) you bee taking away(2) ,thinkin of them better dayz (4),
    When we blaze(1), escaping in the haze(3), if thats the (4)case then u gotta fucking (2)stay (3) , G is poppin with them great girls(4) never treat girls(2) like it break(4)fast(1) but eey I gotta eat first(2) thats my lesson learnd (4),
    Bitches with the flesh(2) on always tryna get the (4)best one (1), with the breast form(2) , sexy ass, baby come(4), cuz the thug gets(2) it going on (3) , I used (4)be the one chasing (2)now they wanna page(4) me crazy hoes im evading(2) leaving them without a trace and(4) ,I bee forever blazin(2) tryin to get away(4) like, I said ,tryna find(2) some betta places (4)
    Got mutch to say man(2) , thanking god when im praying thanking for my brain cells(4)

    • Zero S6X
      Zero S6X
      Reply

      A’ight man, I’ll say not bad not bad at all. 😀 But Uh I think DemoKingz is the right guy to say where your flaws came in. The site offers a flow course, you might wanna check it out. Little worries you’re in the right hands! 😀

      • Schemes
        Reply

        Thanks man appreciate it !
        Yes I will buy the flow course and the lyrics course 😉
        Right now I feel lost gain so much information that I dont know how to apply it correctly man, maybe flow course will help me with that .
        Hope demokingz tell me what needs to be done haha.
        Thanks!

        • DemoKingz
          DemoKingz
          Reply

          Cool, so first question I got is whether English is your first language or not, because I think I’m sensing an accent here and there, so I just want to know what’s up with that. If it is your native language then I guess one thing you can work on is diction. This isn’t to say that there’s problem with all the words but occasionally I had trouble understanding. Improving diction is usually a matter of practicing the verse more prior to recording. Here’s an article that would help with that – https://rappingmanual.com/how-to-practice-verses-before-recording/

          Next, your sense for the beat was solid, though you can always improve and add more harmony to it. This is well explained in the flow course, and the actual task that deals with it is available for free so I suggest that you check it out. On the same note, the numbers in brackets suggested to me that you pay attention on which beat of the bar your rhymes/emphasizes fall, which IMO is a more limiting method in contrast to the flow course. However, most rappers use it and if you’ve been used to rapping like that then maybe it’d be difficult to change habits, though again, you can always implement stuff from the course to the way you do things, and the utilization of melodies i.e. having more harmony is a great tool to have in your arsenal of flow/delivery. – https://rappingmanual.com/rm-flow-course-task-1-scatting-to-a-beat/

          Third, you got a cool tone to your voice and you tend to rap the ending rhymes of your lines with a flavor to them, and the only thing I’d suggest is that you practice more tones like that i.e. expand your vocal range and add more variety to the way you end lines (the way you spit the rhymes basically). An article that deals with that is this – https://rappingmanual.com/rap-tutorials-rhyming-words-vs-rhyming-voice/

          Yeah, so in general you got a great baseline of skill and with practice you will only get better 🙂 Check the links from above and implement what I said in this comment, and if you get the flow course then even better. 🙂

        • DemoKingz
          DemoKingz
          Reply

          Oh and the flow/lyrics courses are definitely designed so that they are as SIMPLE as possible while at the same time including all the fundamentals of rap and uniting them in a great big picture, meaning each tasks is dope for itself but it also acts as a piece of a bigger puzzle, and the 2 puzzles – flow and lyrics come together as well. The 2 course contain everything you need and the bonus content articles add that much to it. So yeah, it’s simple but most effective and once understood, what is left is that you apply it in practice and on the regular (pretty much every day) and with time you get better at executing the “rapping formula” the course offers and it becomes more and more natural to you.

          • Schemes

            Man you’re awesome didnt bealive you would comment thanks!
            English is not my native language thats why haha,
            but I will do the diction like u said ! Beacuse hiphop is at it best with english 🙂
            And I will take everything you said and improve every step of it .
            This site is crazy man without you guys I would be no where now!
            As soon I get my money fixed up I will donate and buy the flow course and lyric course !
            Like u said I have skills but I just need to put the right practice into it .
            Respect to you and the whole site demokingz
            Hope your dreams comes true aswell as mine youre dope!

          • DemoKingz
            DemoKingz

            Haha, sure thing man, I enjoy giving feedback. Feel free to post songs when you have them 🙂

            Sounds great, you should definitely do that. All of the things I say have been very helpful for me thus far.

            And thanks man, same for you, stick around and do your practice!

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