This is our newest rubric, in which we’ll practice our abilities to improve already written bars.

Why do we need this?

Being able to improve bars, that are already written, is a very valuable skill. When you write your own songs, it’s good to first focus on the argument and then pay attention to the actual rhyme scheme.

This exercise is not just about pimping up the couplet. It’s about upgrading it, making it more complex, but still maintaining its original meaning. You should learn how to balance between the rhyme scheme and the content.

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This exercise will also get you into the habit of double checking your bars. It will get you into the mind space of wanting to go back and improve what you’ve written. Make it better. Make it perfect.

What would you have to do?

1. You’ll get one couplet. In most cases, it will be two simple bars, that focus on content and not on the rhyme scheme. Usually holding a 4-4 rhyme scheme.

2. Your job is to improve their rhyme scheme, while keeping its content as potent as it was in the beginning.

BE CAREFUL: Content will be diluted if you don’t pick the right words. If not picked correctly, too many rhymes will water it down and it will surely be noticed.

Example

1. Basic Couplet

I’ll build my very own self sufficient network
You can be the famous guy, while I grow my net worth

2. Updated Couplet

I’ll own my very own self-sustaining network
Fame ain’t the main game, let me reign with net worth

Now It’s Your Turn!

1. Basic Couplet

We playing on a higher game of chess, Once you
delegate his bills who gon’ fuck his bitch the best?

(Pusha T Lyrics from Nosetalgia)

2. Updated Couplet(Compounds)

(Write your attempt in the comment section. Try upgrading this couplet, by including compounds in it.)

Attempts will be reviewed and constructive feedback will be given 24 hours within your entry.

 

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  • King
    Reply

    play a game with me, know I’m superior
    compare his bills to mine, his bitch choose the best

  • Fizzy the rapper
    Reply

    We test the ability of our brain cells on a royal game of chess
    Once you sweep his bills who gon treat his bitch the best

  • Jared
    Reply

    He flexed, after losin’ a game of chess, let s delegate his stress, and see who bend his bitch the best

    • Jared
      Reply

      On second glance change the word see to bet and and s at the end of bend and it’s gold 👌

  • Elite
    Reply

    We playing on a higher game of chess, Once you
    delegate his bills who gon’ fuck his bitch the best?

    Advanced
    we playing on higher game of chess, saying amma liar my chest is infested with cess

  • Elite
    Reply

    Basic
    I’m coming into this game swinging fists / at bitches calling all of them lame/

    Tweaked
    I’m coming into this game head down / both fists swinging most hits spinning your head /round

  • Elite
    Reply

    I think it would be a good idea if you took someone’s track and analysed a rhyme scheme or technique they use. But use someone’s off of here’s track so they can have their own analysed and improve.

  • Lazarus
    Reply

    Basic:
    We playing on a higher game of chess, Once you
    delegate his bills who gon’ fuck his bitch the best?

    Revised:
    When you play that game keep yo piece straight, or I’ll
    take a kings ransom, seize that queen and make and make her check mates

  • Omar the Titan
    Reply

    Advanced movements my chess fluid
    Spark riots after dark you pawns ruined

    Thoughts? Compounds seem to be a little tricky….I’m working on them though lol! Site is amazing! Can’t thank you enough! Oh on a side note…I believe I have 2 triple entendres. I know they are thought to be undoable…wanted to share in private to get your thoughts.

    • Elite
      Reply

      There not bad in my eyes man break them down to noises that helps me.
      An illusive slash abusive bastard who’s mastered the craft dude his shit bigger than Kardashian booties

    • Elite
      Reply

      There not bad in my eyes man break them down to noises that helps me.
      An illusive slash abusive bastard who’s mastered the craft dude his shits bigger than Kardashian booties

      I just see that as the who noise rhyming the iv noise rhyming and the as noise rhyming if that makes sense haha.

  • Intel
    Reply

    we makin moves on a planet farther than the third from the sun
    take ya girl fuck her for fun and duck her when i’m done

  • Contreras
    Reply

    life is more or less a game of chess, wealth stabs your heart from the back, the knife is poking through your chest, never ends well with your mans best fucking your girl in the white dress.

  • FreankinMind
    Reply

    This ain’t no simple shit we on a heightened level,
    Take the essentials and fuck yo’ bitch on a back pillow.

  • Quotes
    Reply

    We placing a bet on a russian roulette version of chess,take his cash no need to ask,who gone fuck his bitch the best

    • RappingManual
      Reply

      Nice work as well! Although, you’ve enhanced the rhyme, but can you contain this in a single couplet? I bet that you’ll find it hard.

      That’s the skill that you’re developing from this exercise-re-wording phrases. Make them sound sicker, keep the meaning and keep them to their original lengths-just change the words.

      Nice attempt though! You’ve gotten the main idea!

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